Sunday Scribblings: I get that sinking feeling…
A darkening sky
The shadows lengthening by
The retreating sun
The darkness creeping in
As time passes by;
You were crying now
I get that sinking feeling
I’ll never see you again;
This is the last time
I held out my hand
To touch your beautiful golden lock
To look at your tear-streaked face
To see what’s reflected in your eyes…
Where there were love and passion before
Now replaced by sorrow and grief.
Farewell, this I accept
Even if I taste the bitterness;
This I feel when I see you off
The loneliness, the emptiness…
Will both remain with me forever?
I’ve only just get on-line, and saw this week prompt for Sunday Scribblings, which is “I get that sinking feeling…“. Well, since Sunday is almost over here in KL, so my entry is just this short piece. 
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Beautiful ..
Short, but oh, so eloquent.
@Shelby / @MissMeliss
Thank
Nice and short. Why is there a question mark at the end? Seem like the goodbye is not so permanent but then I am reading too much into this.
Hmm, good question. Well, when I first broke up with my first love, which was ages ago, I swore never to fall in love again. Fickle eh
So I guess that’s why I put the question mark, making the protagonist wonder if the pain will ever be gone.
I can feel your pain…I think we’ve all been in that place before. I hope you will find someone again who will make you want to open your heart. :~)
Hi Fledgling Poet,
Well, what I wrote was based on my past experience. It was really painful at the time. But then again, it’s all in the past. I’ve moved on…and have found my life partner now. I guess, anybody who’ve had a bad experience in their past will never truly be able to forget it. Same here with me.
Thank you for your kind word. I really appreciate it
In moments like those it’s hard to imagine that the pain will ever lessen, yet somehow it does. Or at least becomes bearable.
A beautiful post very touching
@Robin
Well, as they says, time is the greatest healer. It just that in some case, it does take a very long time to heal….
@Harmony
Thanks
Very beautiful. It evokes feelings of heartbreaks of all kinds. I almost saw it more as the death of a loved one, than a break-up. And the picture is gorgeous!
Thanks for stopping by my Sunday Scribblings. This poem is good. Thanks for posting it. Like the comment before mine, I saw it as a death not a break up.
Sedihnya…
Joezul! You’re a good poet, you know!!
I love it..its something I can understand totally…often poets use words and feelings to describe something that happened a while ago.Its not that you actually feel this pain right now, but you can recall it and put it into such beautiful, touching and deep words.Joezul, you have amazing talent.We all have gone through these type situations in our lives, and you have done a grand job of putting thoughts feeling and emotions into this lovely sunday scribble.
@Karina/@Suse Bee
Well, it is a bit dark. I don’t blame you for thinking about death.
Thank you.
@Emila
Hmmm, I’ll try to be… but there’s still more improvement needed.
Thanks.
@Jesse
As t it, I can still remember all my bad experiences clearly and vividly, whereas all my happy ones are a little blur. Guess i don’t really have that much happy memories 
thanks
Hello Mr. Poet! I love the fact that u keep on coming up with such good poems based on ur past even though u’ve moved on. This is what it’s all about, the ability to write abt something sad so well, even though u’ve moved on to better things in life. The memories still do linger, excellent JOE!
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He he…Thanks Marzie
To tell the truth, unlike you and emila, I really don’t have any special talent at all. Others than my experiences, my imagination is seriously lacking. I guess that’s the setback of having a purely technical background, you develop the logical part of the brain more than the creative part.
Hello Joezul, just sipping a nice hot cup of morning coffee and enjoying your comment section,lol, I always think all the fun of the blogosphere can be found by reading blog comments. ha ha..its true.I think it dont matter what kind of memories you have, Joe, whether happy or sad, they still help you write such powerful poetry!You do have lots of talent in the writing sector, despite having your technical background ..is English your mother tongue??..ok, happy day to you and yours..Have Fun
Hi joe, that’s a sad poem!
you are able to express very well in poems! your past has given you a good platform for good poems. great job, joe!
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Poem that calls up our emotions. Loneliness and emptiness is a passing phase. Happiness will come by soon enough to replace. I like it. Beautifully crafted post!
Hello Joezul, I just came around to say hi .I have brought my coffee along as well, in case you have not bought any Arabica ! I must say Its truly amazing that you can write so well in english, and english is your second language.My first language is English and Afrikaans is my second, I can speak Afrikaans fluently but when it comes to writing it… well, I am a failure !
I saw that comment you left, regarding hosting my own thing, I have to leave that for a distant dream, as I cannot afford hosting fees, bet they are quite high! I already pay a high sum for this isp that i’m with, which we all know is the worlds worst ! Maybe after I earn some money online, I can think of that which you suggested. I was just last night informed that my blog was accepted by ppp….so I shall go and check then out further, and see what its all about ! Have a great day further, Mr Ed…cant wait for the next poetic offering ! 
Yeah, me too. Blog comments sometimes are fun…
No, my mother tongue is not English. It’s Malay. Well, I lived and worked in England for 3.5 years straight… but unfortunately I did not caught their cool accent 